Ohmegah
I will have no more of this Miss Amanda doing super lots of reviews and me doing none business! Mind you, college is proving to be mighty hard, but I finished a paper early so, ohmegah, I am getting to you at looooong last.
[0-20 points] layout:
So, it looks like at first, you wanted to me “ohmegah” as in “oh meh gah Becky, look at her butt.” But you have since converted to “Omega” as in, Alpha, Beta, Gamma, Delta, etc., Omega, Pi, Omicron, etc. So now you’re Omega. I will probably still call you “ohmegah” since that is your username, hope you don’t mind.
I like your layout - is it self-designed? If not, you found something that suited you pretty well. I can’t say as I get the “In the Garden of Eden(Death Trap 3-D)” thing, but I’m sure it has some significance to you. I wish you’d punctuate it properly, though - put a friggin space between the last letter of “Eden” and your parenthesis.
You have a great color scheme going on here. It’s easy for me to look at. I dig the boxes on either side, but you should really do something with them - make them longer and fill them in, or put links in them, or something. They look incomplete right now - I feel like my page isn’t finished loading yet. Also, the link to the host seems a mite bit incongruous - you know that diary land is cool with it if you just have a “host” link in there, right?
15 points
[0-10 points] link back: Hurrah, you have a links page! Not hurrah, there’s only a youtube link on there. I don’t give a shit if you have a page SOMEWHERE that has us in it, I don’t want to have to search through your archives for it, dig? This is not cool and you are lucky that I am bored enough to continue with this review. The rest of this diary had best be good.
0 points
[-10-25 points] Grammar and spelling: Well, you have a grammar error on every single page, with that parenthesis thing, so I’m taking off a point just for that. It’s in your layout, for god’s sake.
Your spelling is pretty bad. Watch out for homophones, will ya? They really aren’t that hard to figure out. And past/present tense is a really irritating thing for you to be mixing up, so fix it.
10 points
[0-100 points] content:
Wow, I am looking through your archives and there is not an entry I see without a dark and pretentious sounding title. Okay, here’s one with potential. The title doesn’t give me hope, but it’s the first one I’ve clicked on that isn’t a poem, and trust me, you don’t want me to start things out with poetry.
Oh god, you’re writing about religion. Okay, in this entry, you’re sick of Christianity. You call it a “fascist/socialist party”. Let me clarify before I start talking about this entry that I am not by any means Christian. You, my dear, have got some funny ideas as to what fascist and socialist mean. Fascism is, I guess, sort of what you said - that you have to think and act a certain way. But, my dear, it is a system of government which promotes extreme nationalism, repression, and anticommunism, and is typically rules by a dictator. Christianity actually formed to get away from the “dictatorship” of the papacy, and has no concept of nationalism since it seeks to be global. I’m not sure if it covers communism, since it’s a religion and not an economic theory.
Socialism, meanwhile, has nothing to do with religion. In fact, communism, which is socialisms baby brother, typically seeks to repress religious tendencies. Socialism is what you have when the government owns the means of production. It seeks for the equal distribution of wealth and the elimination of the class system and of private property. Not sure how the hell you are relating that to Christianity, but it’s… well. It’s quite a stretch.
So, I looked up deontology, just in case, because I thought to myself “maybe I’ve had the wrong idea of what it means all along!” And guess what? I didn’t. It is a concept of ethics in which the intention behind the choice matters, not the actual outcome. In all of the concepts of Christianity that I’ve heard, murder is murder and theft is theft, regardless of intention. This is, of course, in biblical terms, not taking into account all of that crusades and war-of-god nonsense. Maybe this is what you mean - where the intention is to kill, but to kill for god? I don’t know if you know what you mean, either way.
I don’t know how old you are, but from this entry I would guess fifteen. I am sick of reading this shit from people about how much religion sucks. It’s what you make of it, so bone up and start believing for yourself, rather than only seeing it as what people tell you it is.
Looking through the archives, I am already irritated, so please know that this means I am reading through titles trying to find an entry I don’t think will irritate me further.
Moving on. Jesus fucking Christ, are you seriously using “thy” and “thine” in here?! For someone who just a couple of days previous called Christians pigs who were waiting to be fattened, you sure like the biblical language. The Alpha and the Omega, is how you end this entry. Oh, I see how you got to your new name. Although, if you’ve always been this pretentious you may well have started out this way. I’m assuming that you do realize that “the Alpha and the Omega” is from Revelation 1:8, and you are either being an egotist and calling your own mind the Alpha and the Omega, or you are being forgetful and think you are clever and dramatic for ending the entry with such a powerful phrase. Either way, quoting the bible here makes you seem awfully inconsistent. Basically, this entry is you being an existentialist, and I am bored.
I do not know how much more of this I can take, but to be fair to you, I am going to find one last entry. I am looking at a lot of them, and trying to find the best one - one that, at first glance, looks like it might have some substance to it. I am not reading in depth because I will end up being pissed at you if I do.
Nope, Nothing. I got NOTHING. I have looked at all of your entries for the past year and have not found a one that will not just make your score go down. As such, I am going to stop here, because really, I don’t want to be an asshole.
3 points, because at least you wrote something.
[0-50 points] anything else: nope. You have a you tube link. You get nothing for this.
0 Points
28/200 points total. Welcome to the wall of shame, ohmegah. You earned it.
love, Sarah